Feedback from Naamah
- Needs to have ambient sounds- you might need to record some natural 'field sounds' and add them over the top. It also needs non diegetic sounds as well to set the mood/tone (and these help to create the narrative as well). You might need foley sounds as well (e.g. when Abi is punching the tent). Was there issues with the ambient sound when you recorded?
-Is the red wool meant to be blood? If so, get some fake blood- there's lots around at the moment as it is Halloween
-Needs more shot variation
-When Abi is talking (1:52) the audience needs to hear what she's saying- important for the narrative development and to help the audience understand the characters motivation
-At times there seems to be time jumps which I think are deliberate, but they are not obvious (if you have not talked about this in your eval you could link it to Over as that too played around with linear time
-Short - worried that you won't make the minimum 4 minute mark. Do you have more scenes to film? It would be a good idea for you to come to some Plus times
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